Week 8 Comments and Feedback

So far, most of the comments I have received have been helpful. I have found the most helpful comments are the ones that give specific ideas on what I can fix. While I appreciate comments that say what parts of my story readers are confused about or think I can fix, if I do not have specific thoughts on what needs to be changed, I do not know what about that part of the story I need to go back and revise. I also like comments that give specific feedback on what I am doing well in the story; this gives me ideas on what I can continue doing for future stories.

I think my comments have (hopefully) been useful for the writers I am leaving comments for. In my comments, I usually mention what I like about the story, like the characters, the ending, the style, etc. When I find parts that may be a bit convoluted or have grammar errors, I usually mention it as a suggested edit for the author. I like using the WWW and TAG methods when I leave comments because I am able to talk about what I like in the story and positively suggest some edits I think need to be made.

I think my Introduction gives other students a good idea of who I am, and I like getting to know them through their Introductions. I think reading other peoples' stories gives me an idea of who they are as a person, while Introductions give me an idea of who they are as a person.

In future feedback assignments, I would like to comment more on what about the author's style I like and give them ideas on what works well in their writing. I think this will help others figure out what they can continue doing for future writing assignments. I hope the comments on my stories in the future will contain specific feedback about what is working well in my writing and what is not; this will help me decide what direction to go in my later writings.

I chose this Feedback Cat because I think the feedback I get in the class will help me grow in my writing. Without comments from my classmates, I will not know what I am doing well and what I am doing poorly in my writing. With feedback, however, I am able to grow as a writer.

Image: Feedback Cat made with cheezburger

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